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urge

encounter

Donna Griffiths, who earned the Guinness World Record, had the longest sneezing fit in history when she was from Worcestershire, England.

Donna Griffiths earned the Guinness World Record from Worcestershire, England, for the longest sneezing fit in history.

Donna Griffiths was from Worcestershire, England, she earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history.

Donna Griffiths, from Worcestershire, England, earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history.

It’s called upcycling. Or turning something you would otherwise throw away into a useful item.

It’s called upcycling, or turning something you would otherwise throw away into a useful item.

It’s called upcycling, which is turning something you would otherwise throw away. Into a useful item.

Sentence 5 is written correctly in the paper.

Change It to They

Change stitched to stiched

Insert a comma after together

No change needs to be made.

Change reduce to reduse

Insert a semicolon after landfills

Change protects to protect’s

Sentence 22 should not be changed.

Delete the comma after plastic

Change breaks to brakes

Change its to it’s

Change used to uses

Change During to Durring

Change great depression to Great Depression

Change the comma to a semicolon

No change should be made in sentence 29.

Change broken to broke

Change became to becomes

Change scraps to scrapes

Change was fashioned to were fashioned

Change insists to insisted

Insert hardly after wouldn’t

Change hair to no hair

Sentence 5 should not be changed.

Insert a comma after shelter

Change were to was

Change availible to available

Sentence 17 should not be changed.

The dog jumped up to greet them, sending bits of fur into the air.

The dog jumped up to greet them. Which sent bits of fur into the air.

The dog jumped up to greet them, this sent bits of fur into the air.

The sentences are written correctly in the story.

Change spun to spinned

Insert a comma after circles

Change obnoxiously to obnoxously

Delete the quotation marks

Change led to lead

Change more quieter to quieter

Insert a comma after kennel

Sentence 34 should not be changed.

Resting on a blanket was a medium-size dog. Who had curly white hair and floppy ears.

Resting on a blanket, a medium-size dog. She had curly white hair and floppy ears.

Resting on a blanket, a medium-size dog with curly white hair and floppy ears.

Resting on a blanket was a medium-size dog with curly white hair and floppy ears.

Change delicately to delicatly

Change rised to rose

Change and to she

No change needs to be made in this sentence.

Unfortunately, my hands aren’t interested, they don’t care what my brain is telling them to do.

Unfortunately, my hands aren’t interested in what my brain is telling my hands to do.

Unfortunately, my hands and my brain aren’t interested in what it is telling them to do.

No revision is needed in this sentence.

A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream, and from the car behind me, it returns my focus to the world around me.

A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me, it came from the car behind me.

A shrill scream from the car behind me snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me.

A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream from the car behind me, returning my focus to the world around me.

All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind, the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels, and the piercing shrieks of my fellow passengers

All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind and the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels, I can also hear my fellow passengers who have piercing shrieks.

All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind and the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels and my fellow passengers and their piercing shrieks.

All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind next to the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels beside my fellow passengers who have piercing shrieks.

For example

To repeat

On the other hand

In fact

They write essays, take tests, and do homework while there are sports practices.

They write essays, take tests, do homework, and attend sports practices.

They write essays, take tests, and do homework, they also go to sports practices.

Sentence 3 is written correctly in the paper.

Our school should join other schools in implementing a citizenship program that will require service projects within the school.

School can be a place where students are part of something bigger than just academics, classrooms, and lunchrooms.

We as a school can offer programs that help kids do amazing things with their lives today and add to their futures.

In this paper I’ll tell you how we can set some new goals and encourage kids in our school to be more responsible.

businesses

programs

students

schools

Change has even written to has even wrote

Change has even written to have even written

Change has even written to even writing

No change needs to be made.

Furthermore, quite a few legal holidays are celebrated on Mondays. Including Presidents’ Day, Memorial Day, Labor Day, and Columbus Day

Furthermore, quite a few legal holidays, including Presidents’ Day, Memorial Day, Labor Day, and Columbus Day, are celebrated on Mondays.

Furthermore, quite a few legal holidays, including Presidents’ Day, Memorial Day, Labor Day, and Columbus Day. They are celebrated on Mondays.

Sentence 13 is written correctly in the paper.

Change a to an

Change average to averege

Change can collect to collecting

No change should be made in sentence 18.